The Creeper – Chapter 3

This is yet another continuation to my Write Anything Fiction Friday entry entitled The Creeper. This is the shortest of the three entries but I think this helps close out the journey to the cabin. I think that I’m going to edit and combine all of the pieces after one of two more installments. At that point I’ll take a look at where I am, in regards to the storyline, and go from there.

The Creeper


The Creeper – Chapter 3

The previous nights chill quickly dissipated as the morning sun rose higher and higher into the sky. Dew clung to the waist high grass, soaking Tom to the bone. The added weight of wet cloths combined with the heat of the rising sun was sapping his strength at an alarming rate. Sweat flowed freely from the boys skin, stinging his eyes and splattering every which way with every step.

“Can we take a break and rest I the shade?”. Tom’s low shaky voice broke the silence. The two had not said a word since they started off through the grass.

“The trip to the cabin has already lasted twice as long as it should have. We need not rush back to my cabin but I would not like to delay. I have been gone too long already. Stay in Zeus’s track, the walking will be easier.” Karn’s words were final and he never broke his stride as he trudged on.

“He is even meaner than Molly” Tom thought to himself. The walking wasn’t hard, it was just so hot. Every inch of his body was wet, either from liquid on the grasses or his own sweat. Blisters were forming on both feet and walking was becoming painful. “I didn’t even know I could get a blister there” Tom thought to himself as he winced at the latest pain to be brought to his attention.

The blisters were painful but were overshadowed by the throbbing pain in his head. With every thump of his feet into the grass, a thud of pain reverberated through his mind. “So thirsty, if it wasn’t so gross I’d suck the water right off the grass”. The thought crossed his mind and for one brief moment, he considered doing it.

“It isn’t much farther. The cabin is just up ahead, it should be in sight very soon.” The voice boomed out from ahead. Karn as his dog had not hastened their pace but Tom was lagging behind as his mind drifted. Concentrating on moving forward was becoming difficult and his vision was becoming hazy.

“Pick up the pace boy, this is far from a strenuous hike”. Karn’s voice was firm but sounded as if it were no more than a whisper as it rippled into the boy’s clouded mind. “Not much farther” Tom panted to himself in a now husky voice. Shaking his head, as if it would clear his foggy mind, Tom trudged on. Before taking six steps he stumbled and found himself face down in the wet grass,

“I pushed you too hard, too fast”. Karn’s words were meant for himself but they somehow penetrated Tom’s mind as he vaguely felt his body hefted from the ground. “But times are hard, now is not the time to be weak”. Those were the last words to enter the boy’s mind as he slipped into unconsciousness.

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6 comments On The Creeper – Chapter 3

  • Hi Walt…While everyone around me is getting all excited about the conclusion to ‘Lost’ and guessing what it was all about, here i am more concerned with what is happening with Tom in ‘The Creeper’.
    Very good work once again. Now get writing man.

    • Well, if you have any guesses as to what is going to happen, feel free to let me know because I’m mostly making it up as I go along….. lol

      It seems like with every additional piece of writing the story requires two more to close out what I’ve built on. I wound up adding this part of the story because the journey to the cabin felt incomplete in “Chapter 2”. Now I think I can safely move into the cabin and continue building the story.

      Thanks for the comment.

  • This could end up being a novel by the time you are done 🙂 I like it!

    I am curious as to where he is and what “hard times” were talked about.

    Anxiously waiting for Part 4!

    Mike

  • Mike,
    I have a couple of ideas for the “hard times” but nothing has been set in stone. I’ve got a few ideas to play around with before I start writing again. The more I think about this little piece the larger it gets, lol

    Thanks for keeping up with the story and leaving a comment

  • I am so glad you continued this story. It is worth waiting for. I will be checking back for chapter 4. So far it’s really picking up the pace and building up suspense. Good stuff!

    • Terry,
      I’m glad your enjoying the story as it develops. Its been a lot of fun and I am curious myself as to where it goes (I know the ending, everything before it is being written as I go)

      Thanks for the comment

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